Best First Sentence Contest III: Winner Announced
Just over 300 entries (both sites combined) the vast majority of which were beautiful and brilliant.
He came there every day, before and after work, but he didn’t notice the tattoo of a single hydrogen atom on the nape of her neck until today.
This elegant sentence has a hint of intrigue and an original twist.
Happy 4th of July.
My thanks to you all.
12 Responses and Counting...
I would have enjoyed wining, but think you made a great choice. Congrats, rapideyemvmt.
Thank you, Mark. That was gracious.
I loved your submissions.
wow! this is very exciting! just the motivation i needed to get the juices flowing. a celebration i surely in order!
many thanks and best regards,
Great contest. Really made you stretch the imagination an Einstein working as a waitress. The winner’s sentence is very elegant it leads you like all good sentences do. I must admit I wanted to win. I really loved the contest it was a great idea. It made me stretch. Good job, Ray and great idea.
Thank you very much, lennard.
Winning sentence isn’t grammatically correct. ‘Came there’ needs to be Went there or came here. Other than that it’s really really good. Loads of potential as a writer. Someday you might even recite poetry shirtless. Just gotta work on your abs and grammar.
Oh, don’t be such a Sore Loser.
When you’re paying the prize money out of your bartending wages, then you can be a sore loser. You can also then be pilpulistic. As long as I’m sponsoring and funding the contest, I have say.
Besides which, I loved her idea and her atom image, and that was more important to me than strict grammar, as it almost always is. I stand by my decision, and I’m happy to fight you on it. Ever read the first sentence to Absalom, Absalom?
Late as usual: Had she not imbibed, late into the night before, the extra Anejo from the luminous and mystically hand painted ceramic bottle from the heart of Mexico, Judith would never have come to the sunrise of her discovery the morning after, as she poured from the fresh pot of coffee into his shaking hands.
Oh, I like that, Cameron. Thank you.
Better late than never.